The best line you’ve got

Coco Chanel Quote

Ms. Chanel got it right.

You know what I’m talking about right? It’s the line in 80,000 words of a story that you are most proud of.

The way it rolls off your tongue, the way it lingers in your brain… Everyone’s got one.

I read somewhere that Stephen King’s favorite line was the beginning of his Dark Tower series:

The man in black fled across the desert and the gunslinger followed.

Best opening line ever… except maybe “a long time ago, in a galaxy far, far away…

What’s your favorite line that you have written?

My favorite up until yesterday was from Book 4: Thrice Burned:

I was once again fighting a losing battle with my umbrella as I came in the door and nearly swung the useless instrument into Miss. Coleson in my frustration.

“Oh dear!” I exclaimed, diverting the would-be weapon at the last second, avoiding injury by mere inches, “Miss Coleson! I didn’t even see you there! So sorry!”

“Portia!” she said back, a wide grin on her face, “Come in girl! That rain is enough to make any Londoner forgivably homicidal!”

Now, I am pleased to say it is this one, from Book 6 (tentatively titled ‘Truth be Told’)

He had walked a few steps before I called out to him, my eyes closed: “Do you ever wish I could turn it off, Mr. Dawes?” I swallowed past the lump in my throat, “do you ever wish you had not met the granddaughter of Watson and Holmes?”

“Yes.” his voice came out of the darkness with no hesitation, “and never once.”

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9 thoughts on “The best line you’ve got

  1. I’m not sure, but I definitely enjoy most of what I write, even if I do have to kill off a character or two sometimes. Maybe I have yet to write my favorite line.
    Well, when the time comes, I’ll know.

  2. The thing is I kinda think everything I write is great. But the lines you’ve got up there are pretty great too. Maybe everything in the world is great. Dear god am I high?

    • Lol; Reed, take a breath, maybe you just have a really positive take on life, and the glass is literally always half-full. Tt’s all good. Thanks for the comment and for following!

  3. Totally! The saddest part is realizing that one of those gems just isn’t working and I have to cut it. But it’s such a good feeling to craft something that captures exactly what you wanted to, in a witty way.

    Here’s one of my recent favourites
    “I feed myself a steady diet of comparison and perfectionism (and chocolate; there’s always chocolate).”

    Btw, cool site. The process is fascinating! Can’t wait to read your finished product someday, then tell stories of “I knew her when…”

    • Oooh, I like that line, very smooth….
      Thanks for the comment, and for the kind words m’Lady, and how about no matter where this writing goes, we be able to say about each other – “that girl? Oh YEAH, I knew her when she was five kinds of awesome… and she gets better with age.”

  4. Do you ever have it when you’re thinking about a future scene for your book and go through the characters’ dialogue in your head, suddenly come up with really good wording, and frantically look for paper so that you can write it down? That’s pretty much the story of my life. Hahaha!

    I have several favorite lines from the book I’m currently working on, but one that I really like is “The sickening sound of metal splitting through soft flesh and bone resounded throughout the arena.” As disturbing as it is, I just love the way it flows.

    • That is both disturbing and beautiful – I agree. I said it aloud twice, rolling it around my mouth, it felt and sounded really good. The people around me looked decidedly uncomfortable by the way, so I think it works on both levels!

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